Wednesday, April 12, 2017

Childrens' Story Draft

1)Ruffles was a small puppy, much smaller than the rest of his siblings.
Ruffles loved to play, run, jump and lick, though some things were hard for Ruffle to do.
2)What Ruffles loved most was adventures with his best friend Tommy.
Tommy and Ruffles took the same walk down to the river near Tommy's house.
3)Ruffles followed everything Tommy did.
4)Tommy would jump every crack in the sidewalk, and so would Ruffles.
5)Ruffles would huff, puffy, wiggle and jiggle. But eventually, he would do it.
6)Tommy would roll down down the hill until he reached the bottom.
7)Ruffles would muffle, tuffle, tuck and bounce. But eventually he would do it.
8)Tommy would rustle through the leaves and frollic through the grass.
9)Ruffles would trip, shuffle, boop and bop. But eventually, he would do it.
10)Something about today was different however.
The stones that crossed the narrow river where Tommy and Ruffles would pass through had been moved far far apart.
11)Tommy skipped across the stones with ease, but Ruffles had a much harder time.
"Come on Ruffles, I know you can do it! Just put a little wiggle into it!" Tommy cheered at Ruffles.
12)Ruffles weebled and wobbled on the stones, his paws slipping into the water. He grunted and growled and leaped with all his might.
13)"HORRAYY RUFFLES" Tommy exclaimed! The two friends jittered with with excitement.
14)Though ruffles was small and things were hard for him, he could do everything anyone else could do. It just took a little work.

For the illustrations I am wanting to show Tommy the boy and Ruffles the puppy playing and running and Ruffles flopping around.




2 comments:

  1. 1)Ruffles was a small puppy, much smaller than the rest of his siblings.
    Ruffles loved to play, run, jump and lick, though some things were hard for Ruffle to do.
    2)What Ruffles loved most was adventures with his best friend Tommy.
    Tommy and Ruffles took the same walk down to the river near Tommy's house.
    3)Ruffles followed everything Tommy did.
    4)Tommy would jump every crack in the sidewalk, and so would Ruffles.
    5)Ruffles would huff, puffy, wiggle and jiggle. But eventually, he would do it.
    6)Tommy would roll down down the hill until he reached the bottom.
    7)Ruffles would muffle, tuffle, tuck and bounce. But eventually he would do it.
    8)Tommy would rustle through the leaves and frollic through the grass.
    9)Ruffles would trip, shuffle, boop and bop. But eventually, he would do it.
    10)Something about today was different however.
    The stones that crossed the narrow river where Tommy and Ruffles would pass through had been moved far far apart.
    11)Tommy skipped across the stones with ease, but Ruffles had a much harder time.
    "Come on Ruffles, I know you can do it! Just put a little wiggle into it!" Tommy cheered at Ruffles.
    12)Ruffles weebled and wobbled on the stones, his paws slipping into the water. He grunted and growled and leaped with all his might.
    13)"HORRAYY RUFFLES" Tommy exclaimed! The two friends jittered with with excitement.
    14)Though ruffles was small and things were hard for him, he could do everything anyone else could do. It just took a little work.

    For the illustrations I am wanting to show Tommy the boy and Ruffles the puppy playing and running and Ruffles flopping around.

    Alyssa, I really love the idea for your story! I especially like how you worded the last line. I would change how you word line 10 to "However, today something was different". I'm really excited to see how the end product turns out.

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  2. Childrens' Story Draft
    1)Ruffles was a small puppy, much smaller than the rest of his siblings.
    Ruffles loved to play, run, jump and lick, though some things were hard for Ruffle to do.
    2)What Ruffles loved most was adventures with his best friend Tommy.
    Tommy and Ruffles took the same walk down to the river near Tommy's house.
    3)Ruffles followed everything Tommy did.
    4)Tommy would jump every crack in the sidewalk, and so would Ruffles.
    5)Ruffles would huff, puffy, wiggle and jiggle. But eventually, he would do it.
    6)Tommy would roll down down the hill until he reached the bottom.
    7)Ruffles would muffle, tuffle, tuck and bounce. But eventually he would do it.
    8)Tommy would rustle through the leaves and frollic through the grass.
    9)Ruffles would trip, shuffle, boop and bop. But eventually, he would do it.
    10)Something about today was different however.
    The stones that crossed the narrow river where Tommy and Ruffles would pass through had been moved far far apart.
    11)Tommy skipped across the stones with ease, but Ruffles had a much harder time.
    "Come on Ruffles, I know you can do it! Just put a little wiggle into it!" Tommy cheered at Ruffles.
    12)Ruffles weebled and wobbled on the stones, his paws slipping into the water. He grunted and growled and leaped with all his might.
    13)"HORRAYY RUFFLES" Tommy exclaimed! The two friends jittered with with excitement.
    14)Though ruffles was small and things were hard for him, he could do everything anyone else could do. It just took a little work.

    For the illustrations I am wanting to show Tommy the boy and Ruffles the puppy playing and running and Ruffles flopping around.

    Your story is really cute! I love the word choice you used as well as the rhyming words.

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