Childrens' Story Draft

1)Ruffles was a small puppy, much smaller than the rest of his siblings.
Ruffles loved to play, run, jump and lick, though some things were hard for Ruffle to do.
2)What Ruffles loved most was adventures with his best friend Tommy.
Tommy and Ruffles took the same walk down to the river near Tommy's house.
3)Ruffles followed everything Tommy did.
4)Tommy would jump every crack in the sidewalk, and so would Ruffles.
5)Ruffles would huff, puffy, wiggle and jiggle. But eventually, he would do it.
6)Tommy would roll down down the hill until he reached the bottom.
7)Ruffles would muffle, tuffle, tuck and bounce. But eventually he would do it.
8)Tommy would rustle through the leaves and frollic through the grass.
9)Ruffles would trip, shuffle, boop and bop. But eventually, he would do it.
10)Something about today was different however.
The stones that crossed the narrow river where Tommy and Ruffles would pass through had been moved far far apart.
11)Tommy skipped across the stones with ease, but Ruffles had a much harder time.
"Come on Ruffles, I know you can do it! Just put a little wiggle into it!" Tommy cheered at Ruffles.
12)Ruffles weebled and wobbled on the stones, his paws slipping into the water. He grunted and growled and leaped with all his might.
13)"HORRAYY RUFFLES" Tommy exclaimed! The two friends jittered with with excitement.
14)Though ruffles was small and things were hard for him, he could do everything anyone else could do. It just took a little work.

For the illustrations I am wanting to show Tommy the boy and Ruffles the puppy playing and running and Ruffles flopping around.

Children's Story Feedback for Friends

Page 1: It was just another Sunny day for the brown wiener dog Dexter, he woke up as happy as can be.
Page 2: Being an only dog, he was showered with all the love and food he could imagine.
Page 3: Since he has been a pup, he has had numerous adventures with his humans. Endless road trips, walks to the park, movie nights, swimming in the lake, the list was endless!(has been and was-past tense disagreement)
Page 4: One day his humans surprised him and brought home another puppy home, he could not believe it.
Page 5: Mom´s novio was trying to replace him!!!!!
Page 6: She was completely oblivious to his evil plan.
Page 7: The puppy´s name was Oso, he was half Dalmatian and half husky. Mom was completely in love with him!! (You could put this page before page 5 and 6 to explain the character first before discussing his motives)
Page 8: Mom was spending more time with Oso than with Dexter and he hated it. He acted on his best behavior to see if they noticed but they never did...
Page 9: Oso didn´t even speak English, just Spanish, (add a period and start a new sentence) right off the bat Dexter was way smarter than him.

Your story is very creative and I think making a bilingual book is unique. I think the kids will love this story. I think it would be very cool if you taught the kids simple spanish words throughout the story (that may be your plan already).

The giraffe who was too tall

On the first day of kindergarten all the animals arrived at school.
Their new teacher Mrs. Lamb welcomes them into her classroom.
But Grace the giraffe is too tall to get into the room! (You could write this in past tense to make the story flow all together in chronological order)
"Oh no", says Grace. "What should I do?"
Mrs. Lamb comes out and shows Grace how to duck into the classroom.

Next the class goes out to recess and all the children start going down the slide. (instead of saying next, try making a more settle transition to make the story even more live and flowing)
But Grace the giraffe is too tall to play on the slide!
"Oh no", says Grace. "What should I do?"
Mrs. Lamb comes over and states "You're too tall for the slide Grace, maybe try hopscotch!"

I love this story and the moral! I think once you get it all developed its gonna turn out great!

*This is just a start to my children's story Grace the giraffe then goes home and talks to her mom about her day and then feels better and more confident about being tall*

Author Bio

Alyssa Griffin is an author from Springfield Missouri. She is 18 years old and is the child of Quincy and Lisa Glasgow. She lives with her parents and two younger sisters, Aliyah and Miley. As a child she loved reading well-illustrated children's books with her mother before bed. Her favorite authors as a child were Dr. Suess, Jane Brett and Barbra Parks. These authors inspired Alyssa to begin her own creative writing of children's books. She loves to incorporate colorful pictures and elaborate illustrations to keep her readers entertained and to lighten and brighten her stories.

Books for Kids!

The book Will You Please Go Now is a children's book by Dr. Suess. The cover of the book is very colorful and shows a light brown furry character who is being pointed at by 3 pointing finger signs. The book includes 29 very colorful and illustrated pages. The main character in the book is Marvin K Moony. The story is told by a narrator but you never learn much about her/him. The setting does not take place in a specific place rather than it tells the story of different things Marvin K Moony can travel by such as trains, balloons, animals, ect. The narrator is telling Marvin K Moony that he does not care which method he wants to chose, he just has to go. The book includes animals as characters, uses rhymes, includes creatures, silly humor, lots of color, lots of illustrations, and repeated words and phrases.

This book has silly lines such as "Get on your way! Please, Marvin K.! You might like going in a Zumble-Zay." It is great for kids ages 5-8 because of its creativeness and goofy language.

I loved this book as a kid because I loved Dr. Suess and loved the creativeness and characters.